can i have some opinions on my song? its a original

By IvyHasSpirit — June 13
Total Replies: 23
You always chase my sun away,
But you’re chacing yourself.
Its almost everyday,
I seem to think,
You want someone else.
Its not like I get to chose
Who i fall for.
It was un-called for,
I’m unsure,
That your my love.
I am afraid he’s
“Who you want.”
Ive givin all i got,
But still im not
What you need.
I thought I was yours…
I thought I gave you more…
But you seem to want
What I haven't got.
So what does it mean
To be your lover?
Spreading secrets,
But not to each other?
I thought we knew better,
We're not kids anymore…
I don't think I love you any more…
It went from an obsession
And affection,
Hangin on every word.
Fallin for you,
Stalling leaving you alone.
But when I seem to leave,
You're calling him on the phone.
The direction I was headed
Has now become depression
And the scars you have made
Are all in my possession.
I am cut by you,
I was struck by you,
Is this what you call love?
I thought I was yours…
I thought I gave you more…
But you seem to want
What I haven't got.
So what does it mean
To be your lover?
Spreading secrets,
But not to each other?
I thought we knew better,
We're not kids anymore…
I don't think I love you any more…
I don't love you any more….
leaving in a week! wanna watch and respond to people for me while I'm on summer break? tell me!
what did i do?
leaving in a week! wanna watch and respond to people for me while I'm on summer break? tell me!
i messed up so badly by posting this.
leaving in a week! wanna watch and respond to people for me while I'm on summer break? tell me!
Great job.
thanks, it took like 30 mins
leaving in a week! wanna watch and respond to people for me while I'm on summer break? tell me!
do you like :P
does anything need to be improved?
leaving in a week! wanna watch and respond to people for me while I'm on summer break? tell me!
do you like your song :P
no...
leaving in a week! wanna watch and respond to people for me while I'm on summer break? tell me!